Relativity. It's not bad, but my tolerance was too low this morning for me to enjoy it. When I find myself nitpicking the grammar, I maybe need to stop reading. 

Spoilers behind the cut.

If a story mentions Jack's alleged dislike of trees within the opening paragraphs, I roll my eyes (yes, I know I've done it, and the show does it, and everyone's done it, and it's not a heinous sin – it's just boring). If it then goes on to make a Simpsons reference(see notes re. trees), a few lines further on, I'm tempted to skim the whole thing. If an OC then appears who is quite obviously the daughter of one of SG-1 from the future*, but Our Heroes do not work this out until they're told, three-quarters of the way through, I'm not sure I can be bothered to plod through it all, even if there are space gypsies.

In a fanfic, I'd think it was unoriginal, but forgivable if the rest is fun. But in a published, official Stargate book? It may be wrong, but I expect hope for more from something for which I've paid money.

And I'm sorry, but I just can't see Jack naming his daughter "Jade". 



* Science Fiction Rule #127: if a mysterious young man / woman appears, wearing clothes and/or carrying objects that are similar but more advanced to those available to the regular characters, s/he will be assumed to be the son or daughter from the future of one (or two) of said regular characters, until proven otherwise – and sometimes even after that. 

 

ETA: I have commentfic! *loves syxp*